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Writing Samples
Band 7.5

Write a letter to your friend who you recently travelled with to a foreign country. Include • Why you enjoyed the trip • What you are doing now • An invitation to visit you now

Dear April, How are you? I hope you're doing well. To be honest, I really enjoyed visiting the Philippines with you. Actually, it was my first time going to another country. You took me to a lot of places, like the beach and moutain. We ate many Filipino foods. It was so fun. Indeed, I was inspired by the Filipino culture, so I'm working in the Philippines right now.
In addition
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, I have a Filipino girlfriend right away. And
also
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, I'm trying to establish my own company. That's why I really want you to help me. Please come here to help me. I don't have any connection with the Filipinos, but you have a lot of friends. I'll book the flight tickets and stay at my house for free. Just let me know if you are available to come here as soon as possible. Take care of yourself. My friend, Kazuya

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task response
Task response: You answer all parts, but add a bit more about why the trip was good.
task response
Task response: The tone is friendly, but 'I really want you to help me' sounds a bit too strong. Use a softer ask.
coherence and cohesion
Coherence and cohesion: Your letter is easy to follow, but some ideas jump fast. Add simple link words like 'First', 'Also', 'Now'.
coherence and cohesion
Coherence and cohesion: Keep one main idea in each part: trip, life now, invitation.
task response
Task response: You cover the trip, your life now, and the invitation.
coherence and cohesion
Coherence and cohesion: The letter has a clear opening and ending.
coherence and cohesion
Coherence and cohesion: The order of ideas is mostly clear.
Structure your letter

A letter needs to be written using a proper format, including the following:

  • A greeting (Dear sir/madam, Dear John, Dear Mr. Smith)
  • The main body (consisting of paragraphs for each part of the letter)
  • A closing (Yours sincerely, Yours faithfully, Best wishes, Kind regards, Love)

When writing a letter as part of the IELTS General Training Writing Task 1, it is important to include the bullet points presented to you in the question.

All three bullet points need to be presented. And remember that some bullet points contain more than one element. So, make sure to watch for ‘and’ and plurals.

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