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In some countries, governments are encouraging industries and businesses to move out of the cities and into regional areas. Do you think the advantages outweigh the disadvantages.

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Since soaring urbanization is giving rise to congestion in the cities, several nations are supporting industries and business to relocate to the regional areas from the towns. I think the advantage of
this
 development outweighs the disadvantages.
This
 essay will discuss a few of the major merits of
this
 initiative followed by a reasonable conclusion. The
first
 benefit will be that the congestion on the road as well as in the residential area of the cities will decrease.
In other words
, with the distribution of work opportunity among urban and rural areas the population will
also
 move.
For instance
, in
this
 situation the people that migrated from their home town for work will move back to their home city, leaving more space in the city. Thereby, bettering the standard of living of the entire economy. The
second
 major advantage is the introduction of infrastructural development in the regional areas.
Moreover
, as the organizations will shift to the rural they will develop and improve the infrastructure as per their convenience.
For example
, with the establishment of firms, the road, internet facilities in the regional locations will
also
 improve.
As a result
, advancement of the area as well as of the overall economy. To conclude, I think that the government's initiative of moving industries and business from towns to semi-urban location has more merits than demerits as it is not only beneficial for a region but
also
 for the growth of the overall nation and it will
also
 contribute to the better standard of living.
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