Some think that children should start school as early as possible, while others believe that they should start school at the age of seven. Discuss both the views and give your opinion.

These days, lots of kids look forward to starting their educational journey.
However
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most people believe it would be best for toddlers to start
school
quickly, while others would like for them
to begin
from age seven.
This
essay would explore both views as well as my opinion based on the financial capabilities of some parents, and the need for independence and maturity of others. Some people are quick to send their children to
school
when they have the financial stability necessary.
This
is because
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they believe that they would be able to perform their obligations as parents by catering for the financial needs of their children.
For example
, most working parents send their kids to
school
early so they can pay up the tuition before they retire.
Thus
, avoiding any form of
mis-management
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mismanagement
in finances before the
child
graduates from the higher institution.
In contrast
to the above paragraph, other parents would prefer the
child
to start
school
at age seven.
This
is because
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they want the kid to be independent and experienced enough to face the outside world.
For instance
, some parents start teaching their kids from age 3 about how to communicate when approached by strangers and signs of a predator.
Hence
,
this
can only be achieved when the
child
is mature enough to understand what is going on. In conclusion,
although
some people think that early schooling is important for a
child
, it is
also
essential for the
child
to be taught how to interact with new faces other than family, as
this
would help them understand what to do when in an uncomfortable
sitiuation
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situation
,
also
how to look out for an unwanted person around them.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Cognitive development
  • Social skills
  • Competitive advantage
  • Extended childhood
  • Educational system
  • Developmental stages
  • Psychological readiness
  • Curriculum
  • Peer interaction
  • Childhood development
  • Learning environment
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