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One of the most important issues facing the world today is a shortage of food and some think genetically modified foods are a possible solution. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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There are those who maintain the idea that genetically modified foods are a viable key to eliminate the inevitable problem of a scarcity of provision challenging humanity these days. From my perspective, I strongly believe that genetically modified foods would be the paramount solution because by changing genes and creating new pairs of chromosomes not only would scientists ( or people/population ? ) safe corps, but they would
also
 be able to form innovative types of existing products.
First
 of all, by modifying the DNA structure, scientists could provide the population with the eminent opportunity of saving corps despite the detrimental weather conditions, be it a pouring rain or a long-lasting drought.
For instance
, the recent study conducted by researchers in China had shed light on the genes which are responsible for natural
rice
 resilience to harmful impacts of a harsh climate.
Therefore
, by transforming the DNA chain of
rice
 the scientists were able to create a new sort of
rice
 which would prolifically grow in a long-lasting monsoon season.
As a result
, the corps of
rice
 would be augmented which would reduce the scarcity of food in the long run. Another point to be taken into consideration is that the vast majority of current agricultural fields are not able to cover the needs of endlessly increasing human population in the world.
However
, by using the advantages of genetically modified foods researchers could create modern sorts of high-yielding products without expansion of farming plantations.
Consequently
, people would be able to reap an unprecedented harvest in their indigenous territory. Just to exemplify, in Venezuela in 2015 the genetic engineers changed the DNA chain of a corncob by adjoining the extra pair of female chromosomes which boosted the harvest of corn by 20 per cent. In conclusion, I am enormously convinced that due to commencing the usage of genetically modified foods, a vital obstacle of world hunger in mankind would be eradicated.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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