You recently had a positive experience at a department store where a staff member was vey helpful to you. Write a letter to the store manager. In your letter, Mention which part of the store you visited Describe how the staff member assisted you Suggest what would you like the manager to do to reward their good services.

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Dear sir, I am a regular customer of your store. I am writing

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letter to express my satisfaction regarding your good services, which your employee, Martain, provides.

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weekend I came to your store to buy groceries, at that time there was an overcrowded rush because of weekends. as I have

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carried my child and my trolly is

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full of groceries. At that time I was not able to move my trolly anywhere,

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, I did not find the baby diapers in the baby section. That time a young and beautiful lady came to me and helped me to find out the baby staff as well and she

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cleared my bill in the billing lane.

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, she was going to the parking area with me and kept all the groceries in my car. I would suggest to you, she is a very hard working and helpful lady in your store. You can

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add her name to the best employee of the month

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give her a promotion. I hope you consider my suggestion and take action regarding

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as soon as possible. yours faithfully Beant.

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coherence and cohesion

Make sure to use proper punctuation. For example, you should start a new sentence after 'weekends.' and capitalize 'As'. This will improve the flow of your writing.

task achievement

Try to be a bit more specific about the employee's helpfulness, such as mentioning her name at least once in the opening or closing. This adds personalization to your letter.

task achievement

You provided a clear account of your experience and emphasized the helpfulness of the staff member, which effectively communicates your positive feedback.

task achievement

Your language is polite and friendly, which is appropriate for this type of correspondence.

Use a variety of complex and simple sentences

You should use complex sentences in your writing, but it does not mean that you should try to make all of our sentences complex.

‘Complex’ sentences are not actually very complex; they are just two or more simple sentences put together. Putting them together makes the essay more coherent and cohesive.

Examples:

I really want to study but I’m too tired.

I wore a warm coat because the weather was cold.

If action is not taken soon on climate change, global warming will get worse.

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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 6.0

Logical structure

Single idea per paragraph

Greeting and closing

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 9.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 6.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 6.0

Complete response

Suitable writing tone

Appropriate word count

6 paragraphs

195 words

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