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Write about the following topic. The only way to reduce the amount of traffic in cities today is by reducing the need for people to travel from home for work, education or shopping. To what extent do you agree or disagree? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience. You should write at least 250 words.

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During the
last
 50 years, it is clear that gound transportation plays an important role, as it is one of the popular ways people
use
 to get to places or even to work. All of these are ways to help people fulfil their desires
such
 as the willingness to earn money as it will take most people to their work destination or to make money specifically people who drive taxis. As time pass by
this
 is what lead us to experience "
traffic
 jam". Some people argue that the only way to lower down dense
traffic
 is to lessen people's need for travelling.
However
, I totally disagree with
this
 saying as there are many more ways we can do to solve
this
. Nowadays, delivery companies are very prosperous as most people prefer to have someone deliver something to them rather than getting it directly from the shop or the market.
For instance
, in many capital or large cities the application called "Grab" more specifically in the category of Grab food and Grab mart which is an application that allows people to order things
such
 as food from a restaurant or products from stores, is one of the most popular choices people choose to
use
. It became more and more popular and in fact essential during the quarantine in the pandemic of Covid 19 as people couldn't and didn't want to leave their homes. According to a recently published research, it is suggested that as the delivering companies are growing, the vehicle on the roads are most like to from these companies as people nowadays prefer to stay home. To sum up,
although
 reducing the wants of people for travelling is surely one of the ways to reduce
traffic
, it is not the only way to lessen
traffic
 as there are many more alternatives people choose to
use
 that requires the
use
 of ground vehicles
such
 as for delivering purposes which a become more and more necessary nowadays.
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