Extreme sports such as sky diving and skiing are very dangerous and should be banned. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this view? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

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ntegral part of life. People have
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ifferent opinion about
such
sports some people think that sports like sky diving and skiing are
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dangerous
game
, it should be banned by
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overnment. I completely disagree with
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ollowing reasons.
To begin
with, these
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reports
sports
are not
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dangerous
, it is
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ersonal choice of like and dislike some people like some
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adventurous
sports. Another noteworthy point is that
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and of government, skydiving and skiing are operated by privet company so
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government
can not ban
this
.
Also
, training and protection measures are taken by the company before doing these things. For
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example,
last
year, my friend and I went for sky diving,
firstly
they give training and
then
they cover from head to toe
also
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guide
very well for safety measure. so it was not
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dangerous
but it
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good.
Furthermore
, there are
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other
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like boxing and car racing was more
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dangerous
than skiing and diving. Boxing and racing create many health
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,
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erson who
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this
game
may get
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erious injury which
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them
life time
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disability or health issue.For
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example, Khali is
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well known
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player of boxing, in one
game
he got injure very
badely
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badly
resulting he lost his one eye. In a nutshell,
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playing
sports is
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ersonal choice, and skiing and diving
is
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not
dengerouse
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dangerous
, safety measures are taken and these type of
adventerouse
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adventurous
game
are run by privet company so
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overnment can not do banned on
this
. There are other
gamee
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games
game
like racing and boxing is more
dengerouse
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dangerous
than
this
.
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  • thrill-seeking
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  • hazard assessment
  • adventure tourism
  • regulatory framework
  • personal autonomy
  • informed consent
  • risk mitigation strategies
  • thrill-seeking behavior
  • protective gear
  • extreme athleticism
  • freedom of choice
  • accident prevalence
  • emergency response
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  • endorphin release
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