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Some people think the most important skill nurses should have is having good medical knowledge. Others believe there are other more important qualities. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

Many people believe that
nurses
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 must have strong medical
skill
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skills
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. Some,
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,
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 that there is other important knowledge
such
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 as compassion,
patient
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 and detail-oriented. I think
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nurses
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 need some medical understanding, other qualities are equally important.
It is clear that
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 technical knowledge is crucial for
health care
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 workers.
Nurses
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 need to follow their
patients
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' condition every day,
thus
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 quickly recognising new symptoms can be extremely helpful. They need to report them to doctors so that the doctors may adapt by changing medicines, which
help
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 to cure
patients
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 quicker.
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, highly
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skills
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nurses
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 may
also
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 reduce
chances
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 of failure in tasks they perform every day
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 as taking blood or finding vends.
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, there are other
skills
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 that
health care
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 workers need to be trained
.
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 The most important one may be
patient
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 as they need to take care of sick people. In fact, since
patients
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 often face
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frustration and tiredness
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 their illness, they may refuse to eat or
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consume medicine.
Therefore
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,
nurses
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 need to calm them down and persuade them to continue with the treatment.
Secondly
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, compassion is
also
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 a
key-value
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 because without understanding the
need
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 of
patients
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,
nurses
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 may not be able to feel for them and treat them nicely.
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, detail-oriented is
also
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 needed because
nurses
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 often have to prepare medicines. If they do not check them carefully, they may make
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the wrong
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 proportions, which can cause severe issues.
To conclude
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, I believe that there are some important qualities of
nurses
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such
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 as medical, compassion, patient and detail-oriented. The training may not only focus on technical
skills
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 but
also
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 need to enhance soft
skills
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.

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You show a good understanding of both views about the skills of nurses.
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Your introduction and conclusion are present, which is important for any essay.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • Medical knowledge
  • Diagnosing
  • Treating patients
  • Patient safety
  • Care quality
  • Informed decisions
  • Emergency situations
  • Time is of the essence
  • Communicate effectively
  • Healthcare professionals
  • Interpersonal skills
  • Empathy
  • Patient experience
  • Supportive environment
  • Healing environment
  • Emotional intelligence
  • Manage stress
  • Well-being
  • High-quality care
  • Organizational abilities
  • Multi-tasking
  • Responsibilities
  • Smooth operation
  • Healthcare services
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