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Nowadays, people are less fit and healthy than they were in the past, which could affect their long term health. Why do you think this is? What can be done to solve this problem?

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Nowadays excessive weight is a fundamental problem, dimming people's prospects in living their quality life.
Moreover
, obesity is often detrimental
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 people's wellbeing.
This
 essay will examine general reasons
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 overweight and provide certain solutions to combat
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this
 illness. The features of the modern world
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 influenced
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people's lifestyle negatively.
Firstly
, the scarcity of time caused
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opularisation of fast food.
In other words
, those, who are always in rush, buy sandwiches and hamburgers, which are full of fats.
As a result
, these people become obese in mere time.
Secondly
, the dominate part of our lives we keep a sedentary lifestyle as we are using computers and driving cars.
Finally
, it is irrefutable that overstress can lead to hormonal disbalance, which in term tend to add couples of kilograms to one's body. There are some straightforward methods to fight
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obesity.
To begin
, keeping a healthy diet can help to avoid overweight;
therefore
, those who have problems with excessive
kilogramms
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kilogrammes
kilograms
 should address to nutrition specialists.
Furthermore
, doing exercises and having
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ctive lifestyle is essential to
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loose
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 weight and be in a perfect
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.
Last
 but not least, not only physical improvement is necessary for human, but
also
 mental, as today's modern world is full of stress influencers;
consequently
, people should spend more time for relaxation. To conclude, the main reasons for peoples' obesity is
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atty food, shortage of physical activities and overstress.
However
, people can stay skinny and healthy by eating healthy products, doing exercises and relaxing.
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