Television dominates the free-time of too many people. It can make people lazy and prevent them from socialising with others. Do you agree or disagree?

It is vital to have a
television
in a home as it acts as a source of information for the public.
However
, masses over-addiction towards it has taken control of their lives. Some people think that watching
television
for hours can make people lethargic and anti-social. I agree with
this
view to a great extent. In today's
time
,
television
is considered as one of the core reasons for people becoming obese and physically inactive.
Instead
of having a day out with the family and friends,they prefer to spend break-
time
watching
television
.
This
sort of behaviour creates a void between them and society, as they are not left with much
time
to go out and meet people.
Television
has
also
influenced families eating habits. Both adults and kids in a family love to watch it while having lunch or during free-
time
,
this
habit has
also
affected their eating schedule adversely. To exemplify, kids prefer to have a meal at that
time
when their favourite show is showing up on
television
. These few instances have bolstered existing fears in people's mind that they may vulnerable to potential diseases like obesity because of
this
habit. Despite the bad health effects that come with over watching
television
. It has
also
helped people suffering from serious diseases in recovering and spreading happiness.
For Example
, comic serials like "Friends", it is claimed that a cancer patient felt happy, enthusiastic watching
this
series and it was the only show she had watched during her treatment.
Additionally
, it helps people especially kids in improving general awareness about the world.
This
essay argued that people who watch most of their
time
with
Television
have become lazy and have lost social contacts. In my opinion,
television
can be of great help if watched sensibly and by limiting
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ime spent with it.
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