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The internet isolates us and encourages people not to socialise. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement?

#internet #people #socialise
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Since the
internet
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 was created, it has brought some advantages and
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disadvantages
 to society. A common opinion is that the
internet
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 has separated us and foster people not to
socialise
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. I completely agree with
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 view and I will explain the reasons why. To some extent,
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the
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internet
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 is seen as a tool that actually
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 us more opportunities to interact. There are a lot of social media' platforms on the
internet
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, in
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we can interact with people and make some new friends. Before, there were few ways to make friends, whereas now, the
internet
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provide
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 us
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many opportunities to meet new friends, by social media
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.
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, when there is a pandemic going on, the
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 has shown to be the foremost and only tool we have available to
socialise
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 and communicate with relatives and friends. The
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 has had a negative impact
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several generations.
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, the
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millennials
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 prefer to stay at home watching movies on the
internet
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 rather than going out to
socialise
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 with friends.
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, if they go out with friends, they spend the whole time
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 on
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social media
instead
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 of interacting with those surrounding them. When it comes to younger generations, like kids, they are likely to get obsessed with videogames, getting isolated from the external world. A recent study
in
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 the Melbourne university has shown that in 2019, kids spent more time playing
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 the
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 than socialising with
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riend and with their family. To conclude,
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 the
internet
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 has provided us with a new way to communicate and
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, it can
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 make us apart. To me, the
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 has changed the way we communicate and in some cases has encouraged us not to
socialise
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. In the future, I believe the
internet
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 will play an
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important
 role in society either to unite or separate people.
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