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Animals are in danger of extinction. Some people say that we should protect only those animals which are useful to humans. Do you agree or disagree?

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It is an undeniable fact that many animal
species
 are in danger of extinction. So, some people believe that humans only conserve those animals, which are beneficial for them, whereas others argue that all animals are important and they play their role in the ecosystem either directly or indirectly. I cent per cent agree with the latter view.
First
 and foremost, we should protect as many
species
 as we can, because they are, not only an indispensable part of the ecosystem but
also
 an integral part of it. Wildlife plays a vital role to maintain a perfect balance of life on the Earth.
For example
, some wild predators are very useful, due to they help us to control many
species
 by hunting them, because of it they do not exceed beyond the limit.
In addition
 to the above, there are many insects and spices, which are important for making medicines of some incurable diseases, owing to it if these
species
 are endangered,
then
 mankind will undoubtedly suffer from these diseases.
Also
,
this
 creates an imbalance in the ecosystem.
For example
, some insects are useful in growing crops. Due to their presence, the process of irrigation accelerated greatly. If they become extinct,
then
 it will be chances that crop may not grow well, because of it mankind would have to suffer by starvation.
On the other hand
, some people argue that these animals are in huge numbers and it is okay to kill some animals for various purposes
such
 as food, medicine and so on. It is
also
 important to kill them to maintain life balance on the Earth. Some insects and animals create more nuisance, they degrade the quality of the food crop. To conclude, all kinds of animals play a crucial role in the food chain. So, saving them is our onus, because they help us in many ways.
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