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Some people are of the view that only university education can ensure success, whereas many others oppose this view. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

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A school of thought believes that to become a successful person, tertiary
education
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 is the only sure shot
way
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 to get
success
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 whereas others oppose
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view
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. According to my point of
view
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,
university
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 study is the
way
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 to get
success
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 but other attributes are equally essential
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 as personal abilities and experience, practical
knowledge
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 ,to name but a few. It is indeed true that
university
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education
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 gives depth
knowledge
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 about a particular selected field and in that field students make their career. It not only gives academic
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 but
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 practical information which is certainly useful in their future job. These
education
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 systems help them to get lucrative jobs. That being reason more often than not it has been seen that children do hard work to get admission in the best
university
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 to future brighter.
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, it is evident that many companies have criteria that employees must have a
university
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 degree. Because of all these factors ,a section of people thinks that only
university
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education
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 can ensure
success
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.
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, opponents of
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view
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 think that
university
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education
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 alone can not give
success
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. Personal skills and hands-on experiences are required. When people have experience in their field, they can work faster and better
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.
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 need of the hour. By having good command on the language, they can share their ideas and convince others for their perspective. If a person has good
knowledge
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 but he can not explain and share his
view
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, at that time his
knowledge
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 is of no use.
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, to conclude, I acknowledge the fact that
university
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education
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 is the ideal
way
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 to get a lucrative job but at the same time, good soft skills and personal abilities are
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 essential to lead to a successful person.
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