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Billions of dollars are being wasted on space research. the money could be better used to improve conditions on earth? to what extent do you agree or disagree with this viewpoint?

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With the advent of aerospace science, a number of innovations and theories has come into existence.
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, it requires a hefty amount of money for experimentation due to which some individuals contend that money should
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 on other aspects to make a better living on
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 planet rather than spending it on
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 technology.
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 essay will decipher how valuable the aspects
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 as health, education and job opportunities are for the amelioration of humans, along with
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articular premise.
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 and foremost,
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 programmes is a sort of high- end technology which costs a sea of money to the authorities to obtain satisfactory results.
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, the chances of expected results are quite low, sometimes all the efforts and resources went into
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, in some of the developing countries where the problems of starvation, housing, unemployment, infectious diseases and pollution
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 prevalent should try to get rid of these major problems rather than focusing their resources on
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 researches.
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, due to the lack of
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educational assets and basic health care supplies, potential people
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 not get apt opportunities to showcase their talent which gives a hike to unemployment.
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overnment plays a crucial role to resolve these problems. A nation is considered wealthy only if its residents are employed and have healthy medical conditions. Education is another fundamental aspect and is the origin of more educated, creative scientists, engineers and doctors.
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, it becomes the responsibility of officials to provide adequate resources to stand better among all the other nations. To recapitulate,
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 exploration is the necessity of every nation to display their strength to introverts,
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, there are numerous important concerns
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 as education, health care and pollution which requires
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plenty of funding and support from the government.

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    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
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    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
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