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Today, majority of children are raised by their grandparents due to the fact that their parents are busy working. To what extent do you think it affects the whole family?

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In the past, one of the parents, usually mother, stay at home for looking after their children.
However
, with the increase in the career-oriented lifestyle, children had to stay with their grandparents. I believe that
this
 arrangement has more negative effects than positive ones. In
this
 essay, the manner in which parent-child relationship and the
health
 of the young people is affected will be analysed.
To begin
 with, children spending maximum time with their grandparents can afflict
the
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 relationship with their parent. A good illustration for
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are
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 the young people for various countries, particularly, India is being looked after by their grandparents while parents continue to focus on their career. Because of
this
, they do not have enough time to know their parents and fail to develop
the
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 bond of love with them. The negative implications of the pupils have been taken care
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by their grandparents are
thus
 clear. Most of the times, children lose their grandparents when there are growing and
hence
 can result in
the
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health
 problems. The reason for believing
this
 is that they
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 their grandparents can make them feel lonely and they can find it difficult to connect with their parents.
As a result
, they can face the issues related to mental
health
such
 as depression at
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 early age.
Thus
, the link between the degradation of young children's
health
 and the close relation with their grandparents is clear. From the above discussion, it is difficult to debunk that the bonding and the fitness of the child could be hampered if they have to spend an inordinate time with ageing grandparents.
Therefore
, it is expected that parents will prefer to stay with their child in the foreseeable future.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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