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Some people think that when a person travels into a different culture they should adapt to their practices and customs. To what extend to you agree?

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In the 21st century, it is become
a
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easy to
travelled
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 into any corner of the world.
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is start
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 a new conversation that every
country
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 has a different
cuture
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culture
 and lifestyle, that people should start
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adapt
culture
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 or not, some people
thinks
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 that when
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erson visit
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another country
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country
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 they
shoud
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should
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culture
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 and live like them. As per my point of view
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they should try to
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ew
culture
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 and accept a good thing from
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,
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when
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erson travel to
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country
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 if they start to adapt
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their environment
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 it is become easy to know about that
country
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 and their believe and roots.
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Person
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 can enjoy the real meaning of
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 and information about that particular area.
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, people
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 with local people and they
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 with them.
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 to rid of meths about that
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 and
culture
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 because
person
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 sometime
reliese
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realise
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that is
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 not real ground truth that world's think.
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, world's think that for
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country
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 that they would be harsh and support only their religion, but one thing from their
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 is that if any
person
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come
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 for help to their house they have to do warm welcome and take care about that
person
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 without asking about why they came to
thier
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their
 house.
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 is the best practices to allowed people to pull them shelf from their problem without knowing to other people.
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erson can be become relax and focus
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 his or her life.
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, Some people
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 to show that their
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 or where they went has a
suprier
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superior
super
cuture
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culture
then
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other
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. That strat increase the tension about people and increase
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 and evil feeling about the cultures without knowing by self. To summarize, every
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 has
their
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 own
culture
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 and roots and all of them has some good and bad thing. The
person
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 can adapt the good habits and tradition to
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his or her life. The fusion of the
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 gives you
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hance to make
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ood
person
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 on
thier
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their
 life and know
b
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etter understanding of the particular
country
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.
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