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The best way to improve children’s life is fathers and mothers attending course for parenting and child development. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

#children’s #life #fathers #mothers #course #child #development
In
this
 new era, every single person is so busy in their
life
 so they do not have extra
time
 for their kids which really bad impact on children
life
. Its good for them if parents care
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their kids in a proper manner. Some people said that
,
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 it is the best way to improve the kid's
life
 if both
father
 and
mother
 attend the course of child
development
 and I agree with
this
 point of view. To begins with, parents play the best and beautiful role in children
life
 because kids learn everything from their parents. If parents know more about their
kids
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kid's
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development
, that would make them a great human in future.
Firstly
, the
development
 courses help to know parents to nurture their kids in
g
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ood way because parenting
isthe
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is the
 most important thing in a kids
life
.
Secondly
,
father
 and
mother
 get to know more about
time
 spent with the kids because
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in the busy and hectic
life
, some parents can not give a
time
 to their kids, which effect on kids mentally and physically progress
for example
 if one kid only spent a
time
 in school and home every day without their parents, that may affect on kids physically and sometimes they feel so lonely that makes pressure on mental health.
Furthermore
, child
development
 course teach to
this
 new generation family or parents to not
time
 spent only on technology or mobile or other gadgets rather than the spent a
time
 with their kids daily progress
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for instance
, some moms and dads take their kids very seriously that they always spent a
time
 with them and try to play some physical activities like football or basketball etcetera.
Moreover
,
this
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 courses make
father
 and
mother
 smart so they can focus on kids carrier
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for example
 some children decide their
life
 motive or goal to achieve something in small age but the main job of the parents is to help them to achieve their goal. Child
development
 courses are important for every single parent whose kids small or older which clarify the motive of parents in
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ids
life
. The government should take a step and allow to make a child progress awareness camps and every single city so that every
father
 and
mother
 can nurture their kids more good way.
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