Many major cities are facing a housing crisis as they cannot provide enough land for new buildings. Some local governments believe the problem could be solved by reassigning park land for residential development, because this land would be better used for housing. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

It is widely believed that several big cities are struggling with a crisis in housing as they do not have enough space to built new properties. Some governments are suggesting an approach where parkland will be removed from the cities to give space to the construction of new buildings.
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To begin
with, parklands play a fundamental role in the big cities infrastructure. While residential development
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countless waste material during its construction, parklands produce the oxygen needed to
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Moreover
, in order to make big cities look fresh and nice, parklands are needed.
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Central Park is the lungs of the city, without it,
this
city would look plain and green.
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, there are some people who prefer to have city areas where they can only find trees, fountains, plenty
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grass and animals
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make a valuable contribution
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people' well-being and health. Some people use
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to exercise and do some activities like yoga or running.
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studies conducted in Finland has shown that people who have
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near their residents have proven
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healthier than those living in big cities surrounded by buildings. Many people go to
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in order to get away from the rush and stress of the big cities.
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, if big cities do not have green zones and parks, the quality of the air might get worse and more health problem might impact the locals. In conclusion,
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ousing project might necessary in some big cities,
however
, I believe that there might be other ways to build new housing projects rather than eliminating parklands from the big cities. In the future, parklands must play a fundamental role in people well-being and the government should guarantee that they will be preserved.
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