In the future, people may have to live on other planets. Some think that it is therefore important to spend money researching other planets such as Mars. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

✨ Do you want to improve your IELTS writing?

It is true, that if present trends continue, it will become increasingly difficult to sustain human life on Earth. While I agree that it is vital to tackle

this

Linking Words

problem. I believe that expenditure on research for new planets to colonise should be given a low priority, and resources must be used to find other, more practical solutions. There are two major reasons why life on Earth is becoming more and more unsustainable. One obvious problem is the uncontrolled consumption of natural resources, which are being depleted

as a result

Linking Words

For instance

Linking Words

, the extraction of fossil fuels,

such

Linking Words

as coal, gas and oil to satisfy growing energy demands has serious environmental impacts, and these resources will eventually run out. Another concern is the rising level of pollution worldwide, of the land, the oceans and the air that we breathe. In India,

for example

Linking Words

, thousands of tons of industrial rubbish have been released illegally into rivers, killing aquatic life and contaminating drinking water.

However

Linking Words

, I would argue that the search for a new planet on which humans could survive is a waste of valuable resources.

Firstly

Linking Words

, a vast amount of funding would be required to finance

such

Linking Words

space exploration, with no guarantee of success.

This

Linking Words

money is needed now to improve health services globally and to provide better education for all.

Secondly

Linking Words

, financial resources should be used to develop advanced technologies that would be more environmentally- friendly and provide

renew able

Correct your spelling

renewable

show examples

energy. In the field of transport, to take a simple example, vehicles can now be converted to run on hydrogen or even waste cooking oil – as McDonald’s have done with their trucks. In conclusion, I consider that the search for new planets on which to settle is a waste of time and resources, and efforts should be concentrated on living more sustainably here on Earth.

Submitted by hnamca on Tue Dec 08 2020

Unauthorized use and/or duplication of this material without express and written permission from this site’s author and/or owner is strictly prohibited. Excerpts and links may be used, provided that full and clear credit is given to Writing9 with appropriate and specific direction to the original content.

Support ideas with relevant, specific examples

Examples make your writing easier to understand by illustrating points more effectively.

Examples, if used properly, not only help you get higher marks for ‘Task Response’ but also for ‘Coherence’.

When giving examples it is best to put them after your main idea or topic sentence. They can be used in the middle of supporting sentences or they can be used to start a new sentence. There is no rule for where exactly to give examples in essays, logically they would come after your main idea/topic sentence or just after a supporting sentence.

Linking words for giving examples:

for example
for instance
to illustrate this
to give a clear example
such as
namely
to illustrate
take, for example

Discover more tips in The Ultimate Guide to Get a Target Band Score of 7+ »— a book that's free for 🚀 Premium users.

8
Linking words
meeting the goal of 7 or more
0
Word repetition
meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
1
Grammar mistakes
detected issues

0123456789.0505

Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 6.0

Logical structure

Introduction & conclusion present

Supported main points

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 8.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 8.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 6.0

Complete response

7.5

Clear & comprehensive ideas

Relevant & specific examples

Appropriate word count

4 paragraphs

306 words

🚀 Prepare for IELTS writing section today!

Unlimited Task 1 & Task 2 checks
Practice with essays, charts, and letters.
Personalized suggestions & mistake analysis
Spot every mistake and boost your score.
Topic ideas & vocabulary helpers
Expand your ideas and use the right words.
Progress tracking
Watch your writing improve with every practice.

What to do next:

Look at other essays:

6.5
band
The government should put a tax on unhealthy food to promote better health. Do you agree or disagree?
One of the most recent trends in today’s world is the upsurge in fast food, which has significantly increased therefore the government should include a tax on that to promote healthy foods. People have a wide sprit of belief that this is a popular subject in debate. I tend to believe that putting a tax on that has more positive impacts than negatives and this essay will demonstrate with reasons.
6.5
band
Families who send their children to private schools should not be required to pay taxes that support the state education system. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement?
Parents who send their children to private schools should not be obliged to pay taxes that support the region's educational system. It may seem unfair, but in terms of reaching financial equality between disparate groups of people and enhancing all-around education in the country, it becomes reasonable why they should pay taxes.
5.5
band
Discuss the advantages and disadvantages of living and working in a foreign country.
In recent times, the world is evidencing migration to foreign countries for education, employment, improved lifestyle and so on. Relocating from one nation to another for work, living is like two sides of the same coin with its own advantages and disadvantages which will be enlightened in this essay further.
6
band
Some people think that local authorities should control where building can be constructed. Others thinks that everyone should be free to build where they like without permission. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.
Some people opine that local governments have the power to control the construction locations. However, others state that the building choice is on our own, and we should be free to build in the areas we like. For me, I think it will be better if we have some limitations, and I will explain why in the following paragraphs.
6
band
Some people believe that governments should make investment in building public libraries in every town, while others think it is a waste of money because we have access to information via Internet. Discuss and give your opinion.
Some people debate about establishing free libraries in each town. However, some people are convinced that it wastes the public finances while we have access to the internet to gain information at home.

In the future, people may have to live on other planets. Some think that it is therefore important to spend money researching other planets such as Mars. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

Support ideas with relevant, specific examples

The government should put a tax on unhealthy food to promote better health. Do you agree or disagree?

Families who send their children to private schools should not be required to pay taxes that support the state education system. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement?

Discuss the advantages and disadvantages of living and working in a foreign country.

Some people think that local authorities should control where building can be constructed. Others thinks that everyone should be free to build where they like without permission. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.

Some people believe that governments should make investment in building public libraries in every town, while others think it is a waste of money because we have access to information via Internet. Discuss and give your opinion.