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Last week, you celebrated your birthday with some friends in a restaurant. It was a great success and you and your friends enjoyed yourselves very much. Write a letter to the restaurant. In your letter mention the food and service explain that you really enjoyed the atmosphere suggest any improvements to make things better You should write at least 150 words. You do NOT need to write any addresses. Begin your letter as follows: Dear Sir or Madam,

#week #birthday #friends #restaurant #success #food #service #atmosphere #improvements #addresses #sir #madam
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Dear Sir, I hope
this
 email finds you in good health and you are doing well. I am writing
this
 letter to provide feedback about the birthday program that we celebrated in your popular restaurant
last
 week.
Firstly
, I would like to express our sincere gratitude to you and all the support staff of your restaurant who provided us with excellent service during the celebration of
this
 birthday program.
Besides
, the food was delicious, particularly the soup and ice cream.
Furthermore
, we enjoyed our program a lot as the
overall
 environment of
this
 restaurant was comfortable.
Additionally
, the state-of-the-art interior design makes the atmosphere more vibrant which helps us to capture a good quality picture.
Although
 I was over the moon regarding the
overall
 arrangement, I would like to suggest you ensure the required amenities in the washroom as some of my friends were unable to get the liquid soap and toilet tissues in there. I hope you will consider the suggestion mentioned above to avoid the unexpected review from the customers. Yours faithfully, Faisal
Mahamood
Correct your spelling
Mahmood
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coherence cohesion
Begin by ensuring your letter has a clear introduction, body, and conclusion for better structured communication.
coherence cohesion
Develop each paragraph around a single idea to maintain focus and clarity throughout your letter.
coherence cohesion
Use a variety of cohesive devices (e.g., furthermore, although, firstly) to link ideas and paragraphs smoothly.
task achievement
Make sure your letter fully covers the task by addressing all parts of the prompt. This includes mentioning the food and service, explaining that you enjoyed the atmosphere, and suggesting improvements.
task achievement
Adopt a tone suitable for the context of the letter. Your letter's tone was quite suitable, but ensure consistency in formality throughout.

Use a variety of complex and simple sentences

You should use complex sentences in your writing, but it does not mean that you should try to make all of our sentences complex.

‘Complex’ sentences are not actually very complex; they are just two or more simple sentences put together. Putting them together makes the essay more coherent and cohesive.

Examples:

I really want to study but I’m too tired.

I wore a warm coat because the weather was cold.

If action is not taken soon on climate change, global warming will get worse.

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