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Provided maps illustrate the information on how the city of Eastminster changed over 10 years between 1999 and 2009.

Provided maps illustrate the information on how the city of Eastminster changed over 10 years between 1999 and 2009.
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Provided maps illustrate the information on how the
city
 of Eastminster changed over 10 years between 1999 and 2009. The
city
 has a river crossing in the middle of it, separating the
city
 into two parts, and there is a railway station in the
south-west
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 of the
city
 and the railway itself passes through the southern part of the
city
 parallel to the river. Over the given time phase, the
city
 was completely transformed with the removal of the large house with gardens,
decreased
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 area of the park, in
favor
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 of
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a
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new house and Hotel with
golf
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the golf
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 course. One of the biggest changes in the
city
, through
this
 period, seems to be the construction of new Factories
amd
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and
 warehouses which were built in the southern parts of the
city
.
Second
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 largest change can be considered a great increase in the number of
houses
 in the
city
 as the number of
houses
in
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 the north bank doubled and in the place of Public
gardens
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 some new
houses
 were built
next
 to the
aparment
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apartment
 blocks, which replaced the Street of
houses
. The other change to be mentioned is minimized
number
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a number
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 of trees in the Woodland which was because of the construction of a new adventure park.
School
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The school
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 was relocated from the south bank to the north bank of the river and a new shopping complex was built in the previous
are
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area
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 of
school
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the school
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 between the hospital and shops, which stayed untouched within the given
time-frame
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time frame
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.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 100%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words city, houses with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "information" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "give" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "changed" was used 4 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 3 times.
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