Write a letter to a friend who just moved into a new house that you are sending a gift to. Include What the gift is Why you chose it How it will be delivered

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Dear Jones, I hope you are doing well.

First

, I want to congratulate you

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your new house, hopefully, it brings all the happiness and success to you. I

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want to apologize

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not being able to attend

your

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party I was invited

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. As moving into a new house could have been quite tiring, while at the same time it would take you some time to adjust

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the new locality you moved into. So, to relax you a bit, I have decided to give you a music system. It has an inbuilt wide genre of songs that you can listen

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enjoy.

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, you can create

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playlist of your favourite songs. Another feature of

this

system is that you can connect it with your television and can make a home theatre. I know that you are very fond of

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technologies and perhaps

this

is the best give I could ever give to you according to your taste. It will help you to relax and can be your best companion even when you are alone. I have ordered it from Amazon and it will be directly delivered to your house. The delivery will take 3-4 days to reach in the evening

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so that you can collect it yourself being at home. I will look forward to

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you soon and hope that you

enjot

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enjoy

this

present. Yours Sincerely, Paul

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Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately

Linking words are very important in your essay.

To score effectively on your IELTS exam, you should make an effort to implement short concise sentences coupled with linking words.

Almost every sentence in your essay should have a linking word of some sort.

In fact, the only sentences that can omit linking words are your background sentence and thesis.

Linking word examples:

firstly
secondly
thirdly
in additional
moreover
also
for example
for instance
therefore
however
although
even though
despite

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Linking words
meeting the goal of 7 or more
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Word repetition
meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
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Grammar mistakes
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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0

Logical structure

Single idea per paragraph

Greeting and closing

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 4.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 8.0

Complete response

Suitable writing tone

Appropriate word count

8 paragraphs

233 words

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