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IN SOME COUNTRIES OWING THE HOME RATHER THEN RENTING ONE IS IMPORTANT ? WHYS MIGHT BE THE CASE DO YOU THINK IT IS A POSITIVE SIDE OR NEGATIVE.

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We live in a globally developed world where people work to satisfy their own and family's three basic need to survive food, water and shelter. As we live in the century to own
house
 is very difficult. Still,some people prefer to buy a home
instead
 of renting the home. Here we will discuss the negative and positive side of both of them.
Firstly
,
like
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 I said earlier owning a
house
 is very difficult as currently,the prices of the houses are touching the sky. owning a
house
 is has a lot of advantages like we don't need to think about how when we have to pay the rent, can start future planning as we can save a lot of money, no stress of the
house
 owner can do anything we want without any disturbance and many more. Unfortunately sometimes in order to buy the new
house
,people tend to take a huge amount of loans from the bank without figuring out how they will pay it back.
As a result
 of which most of the people becomes depressed as they are in always in constant fear that they might lose everything. Because of being under constant stress some people
also
 get sick and suffer from high/low blood pressure and heart-related problems.
Secondly
, the younger generation of the world believes in renting a
house
 as they can have freedom like they can spend their money on whatever thing they want and
also
 they like to travel and visit different places. But renting a
house
also
 has disadvantages as we live in constant fear that we might have to empty the
house
 anytime, there is always restriction what can we do and cannot do inside the
house
 and
also
 not able to save money. At
last
,according to me owning a
house
 is always and best options but before buying the
house
 we should plan all the things.
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