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The mark of a successful person is to be wealthy and have a successful career. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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Every human in the world aspires to become a successful person. Often,
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 is misunderstood as wealth creation. Even though wealth is an important measurement of
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, it is not the only criteria to
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 it. I believe that
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 is the
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 of satisfaction and
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 fame. Many people think that
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 of
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 is all about measuring how much
money
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 or property you have. Of course, everybody works to earn
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.
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,
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 cannot be applied in all fields.
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, if you have to declare a film to be hit, it should be profitable to producer, distributors and others who do
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 in the cinema field
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 as theatre owners or online platforms
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 as Amazon or Netflix. Ultimately,It is the
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 of profit is made.
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, a
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 which yields more dividends to the owners and investors is said as a successful
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. Now, if you could lift an extra 5kg weight dumbell during training in the gym you feel happy and satisfied,
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 is
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 a
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.
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, consider a sportsperson . Say Messi, Ronaldinho, Sachin Tendulkar, Roger Federer and William sisters. They didn't make
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 as Ambani brothers, Jef Bezos, Bill Gates. Still, they are considered as successful persons and an inspiration for others. It is only because the audience is very much satisfied and happy to watch them. Though, they earned very less amount of
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 as compared to
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 peoples. Though are equally famous as above mentioned
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 personals. To conclude my point, not all
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 is a
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 of wealth you created, some are the
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 of satisfaction in your work and fame you have.

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