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In many countries today, crime novels and TV crime dramas are becoming more and more popular. Why do you think these books and TV shows are popular? What is your opinion of crime fiction and tv crime dramas? Give reason for your answer and include relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience

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crime
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 start to be
palathoura
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plethora
 on the multimedia and drama , in my opinion
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these has
much relation
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 to the change in the world and in the life routine.
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cuses
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causes
cases
 of much
crime
 seeing in TV and drama , it's due to
increase
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 the rate of the
crime
 in the community and
this
 rise in the percentage recently related to economic effect in family and how they grow up their children and how they get
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enough money for all the home expenses. In my opinion
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the
crime
 in drama and TV have
n
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egative effect in our life it
give
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 depress feel and fear as well , in top of that it can
effect
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affect
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 how kids deal with the future , in most dangerous it
make
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 the thinking about
crime
 easy step for adult , teenagers. The reason about my opinions that I remember that I read a study about a percentage increase in
crime
 from
now days
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 and decay
befor
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before
 and its huge
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 in
other hand
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 at that time whenever there is
c
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rime it just solved in aright way without much media .
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