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Some people believe that the society should be based on rules and laws. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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Rules and laws should form
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the
 basis of any successful and viable
society
. Rules govern how day to day activities are carried out in the
society
 and laws ensure that any
deviatiosn
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deviations
deviation
 from the rules are effectively controlled. Any
society
 that prioritises personal freedoms
over rules
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 and laws will quickly devolve into chaos as there would be no common basis on which everyone in the
society
 behaves. A
society
 that values rules and laws over everything else could potentially stagnate due to
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ack of creative outlets for its
memebers
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members
.
Thus
 a fine balance must be struck between rules, laws and personal freedoms.
Such
 a model
society
 would have rules and laws that everyone would follow and at the same time
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there would be enough flexibility for its members to have creative outlets that allow for betterment of the
society
 as a whole.
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