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The news media have too much influence on people’s lives today and this is a negative development. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

In the modern era, Technology has been at the forefront
to provide
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 people with real-time news and updates through apps and websites. Effects of the increasing influence of media houses over people
have
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has
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 been considered a negative effect and
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has
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 some consequences.
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newsroom
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newsrooms
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due to
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 TRP has decreased the content and quality of news being released nowadays.
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 developments in phone technology,
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spreading
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rumour
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rumours
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 or untrue facts has been far easier in the present.
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, before the internet was introduced, the information was communicated through radio and newspaper
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 had less impact on the general population because not everyone paid attention.
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,
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 which are responsible
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 the broadcasts from these channels have made no new regulations even with the increasing influence among the citizens.
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, spreading hatred between two communities through the presentation of false facts has been considered a threat in countries like India. Misinterpretation of facts can be harmful
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,a recent riot took place in the USA
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 wrong information presented by certain channels.
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, I believe every individual has a right to be presented with events or news
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 the authenticity of
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 material should be verified before presenting
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 the country. Improvements made in technology should be used in the development of the country and shouldn't be used to influence the citizens. There is a need to set up regulations which will allow the newsrooms to operate in a professional manner and present true knowledge to
its
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 viewers.

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planning
Plan your answer. Note your view, 2 or 3 reasons, and one or two examples before you write.
structure
In the intro, say your view clearly. Then make 2 body parts with one idea each.
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In the end, restate the view and add a short last point.
coherence
Use simple link words to join ideas, like First, Also, Finally.
content
Give clear examples and explain them, not just name them.
tone
Clear view on the topic.
content
Some real examples are used.
content
Idea of rules and checks is clear.
Fully explain your ideas

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For we to consider an essay structure a great one, it should be looking like this:

  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

Our recommended essay structure above comprises of fifteen (15) sentences, which will make your essay approximately 250 to 275 words.

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