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Most societies has its homeless people. Some people think that the best way to help them is to give them money. To what extent do you agree?

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In the current era with record amounts of debt, gambling and use of drugs have led to
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ncreasing number of homeless individuals both in developed and non-developed countries. There have been various solutions suggested to help the people and most popular being through money aids.
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,some people feel there are better alternatives to help the homeless. Level of education and literacy rate are two important parameters which should be used to determine a country's growth. I believe, Equipping an individual with skills and knowledge will help drastically to reduce the number of unemployed people in a nation.
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, Different programmes have to be launched on the disadvantages of gambling to educate the value of money in life.
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, Sweden is considered to be the most literate country due to its financial education in schools.
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, Jobcentres have to be set up in every city to help individuals get a job based on their talent, skills, ability etc to promote employment.
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, In Canada, we have institutions which help citizens get jobs based on their past experience and
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, Based on the province requirement for labour. To conclude, I believe providing money is not the long term solution to avoid unemployment. Money aid from the government will promote a lack of willingness to work from its citizens and
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 will bring down the nation's growth. There are far better methods to use
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 as education, help centres and work based on provincial needs as discussed to help everyone.
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