Some people believe that longer prison sentences are the best way to decrease crime, while other believe that there are alternative ways to decrease the crime. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

Crime
is something which is present from the existence of mankind. Various type of punishments are being adapted over a period of time and
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onger prison sentence is one of them. Many think that
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imprisonment is the best possible way to
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curb
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,
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strict laws and death penalties would help to lower down the
crime
rate
as compared to longer jail sentences.
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, longer sentences are common,
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if we want to reduce the
crime
rate
we have to enforce strict punishments. People don't take the law seriously because they know what will be the consequences of that
crime
. Many convicts who are on life sentence gets a chance to plea in
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igher court and at times
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. Criminals who are in prison for serious crimes should be given
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eath penalty to set an example and to show the people that what could be the consequences for
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committing
that
crime
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For example
, hands are cut in public if a person is caught doing robbery in an Arab country.
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long imprisonment does not set
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future criminals. Many people spend most of their lives in jail but still doesn't learn anything.
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ictim is never satisfied with the longer sentences,
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they would feel better if
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quick action is taken by the law enforcement people. Many people are still fighting for proper justice, means people who should be hanged are given
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entence of
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ew years. To recapitulate, I would say,
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of keeping the convicts in jail it is better to take strict and
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immediate
action towards them.
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will increase the faith of people in the law and
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help in bringing down the
crime
rate
.
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