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Successful companies use advertisements to make more sales. What can make an advertisement effective? Do you think advertisements are a bad thing or a good thing for society?

#companies #advertisements #sales #advertisement #society
Nowadays, advertising plays a vital role for all entrepreneurs in the world. Promoting goods or services is
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arts of the Marketing mix and many
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I will analyze
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auses that make advertisement effective and give my opinion about the
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 issue on how to enhance ad politics and make new patrons of firms. We can rely on fundamental knowledge from the basic syllabus of ´Marketing´, where we have to depict our customers via researching personal needs, preferences, targets and interests. After the investigation
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specialists can get some results and on top of that
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they can understand future patrons better compared to the past.
Besides
, they can develop a new plan with focused ads that appeal to new clients.
For instance
, the ´Citroen´ vehicle firm had created a new flamboyant ads company that attracted new business clients
this
 year. From my point of view, having excellent ads can lead to opening new branches. It has a good
impact
 if it doesn’t contradict to law and society rules. I reckon that if a company uses aggressive promotion of some items, it will have a bad
impact
 and awful consequences for
this
 company. In general, people avoid intrusive services, because they don’t like when somebody imposes companies views on them.
As a result
, it will lead to losing their sales and revenue. All in all, an excellent and detail-oriented ads approach may have a profitable
impact
 on new consumers. Companies have to scrutinise all results before making the best decision of
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dvancement of products. (274 words)
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