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Some people say that the main environmental problem is the loss of particular species of plants and animals. others say that there are more important environmental problems. discuss both views and give your opinion.

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Rapid industrialization has been witnessed since the start of the 21st century. New technology and innovation have made our lives easy but
on the other hand
, have raised serious threats to our environment. Dumping of Chemical waste in the rivers and seas and emission of harmful gases in the atmosphere is giving rise to several issues. Some people heavily emphasis on the loss of plants and animals as a more serious issue while others think that there are other more serious issues. Discharge of untreated waste material is adversely affecting marine life. Increasing water pollution is giving rise to breathing issues and consumption of poisonous foods.
For instance
, blind dolphins in Pakistan is a rare specie but is on the risk of extinction because of increased water pollution.
Similarly
, the releasing of harmful gases in the atmosphere is endangering the birds and trees.
However
, the solution to
this
 problem of extinction has been devised. Modern storage houses equipped with the latest machinery has been constructed to store seeds and eggs of endangered species. In my view, the problem
such
 as damaging of the ozone layer is of more significant importance. The harmful gases in the atmosphere have damaged the ozone layer which has resulted in harmful rays causing diseases.
Further
, the temperature of the planet has
also
 increased resulting in global warming and soil erosion. These environmental problems are more serious as they are beyond human control. To conclude
this
, in my opinion, the government should enforce strict regulations on the industries regarding the discharge of waste material to control environmental issues.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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