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I have received your letter yesterday regarding the disturbing noise caused by us. I am really regretful about that. As you know we have recently moved to your neighbourhood. We are currently renovating and upgrading the house furniture. The reason for the noise is caused while moving and making those huge furniture items. We are

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changing the glass windows that might have caused louder noises as all the windows and doors are open during that time. I am sincerely apologising

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for your inconvenience. I will take care now onwards to instruct the workers properly to take care and try not to disturb others.

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, I will ensure that work is done without making more loud noises and try to reduce the sound to

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help is required. Again sorry for your troubles. Thanks and regards, Mr Pujara.

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Coherence and Cohesion: 4.0

Logical structure

Introduction & conclusion present

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Lexical resource: 7.0

Varied vocabulary

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Grammatical Range: 7.0

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Task Achievement: 4.0

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encourage
persuade
manipulative
unnecessary
excessive
artificial needs
desires
consumers
oversaturation
impulse buying
financial problems
inform
educate
features
benefits
innovations
raise awareness
social issues
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Some people say that advertising encourages us to buy things that we really do not need. Others say that advertisements tell us about new products that may improve our lives.

Fully explain your ideas

Many people today are worried about cyber crime such as hacking and identity theft. What problems does cyber crime cause and what solutions can you suggest for ordinary people and businesses to take?

Some people feel that playing computer games has a negative impact on children's health and social skills. Others say that it has a positive impact. Discuss both views.

Nowadays people use bicycles less as a form of transport. Why is this the case? What can we do to encourage people to use bicycles more?

The most important aim of science should be to improve people’s lives. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement?

Different types of robots are now being developed which can be a friend, help at work and at school. Do you think this is a positive or negative development?