many childhood diseases can now be prevented through use of vaccine. should parents be made by law to immunize their children against common disease or should individuals have the right to chose not to immunize their children

Although
,many people believe that children should be prevented by government law against the infective disease ranging from influenza,hepatitis and polio.I support
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a large extant for some reason.My position is argued
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with explanations. out of all the reason the foremost one is benefits for vaccine and flu shot.Infants are so sensitive against microorganisms.Even though the blood has immunity power to fight against the disease, Sometimes
that is
not enough.If parents will provide immunisation to their children they can save their offsprings against paralysis and defective disorder,
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polio vaccine B is
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lessing for global babies.They become now even more healthy and
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fitness
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.From the statistical data reported that less than 0.1%
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death children cases are noted.
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, vaccination provides more strength and power to patients.
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accine has antigen and antibody mixture from which body develop immediately after receive.
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ecent survey by
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ndian government shows that 95% of hepatites cases
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successfully recovered
last
year.So children become more vital and energetic against deadlier disease.
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would not overlook the other side too.
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ight to give shots to their children they refuse sometimes due to allergic reaction or having religious myths.
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in some region of India,Parents are prejudice with some beliefs.they are superstitious from there ancestors.They would not provide vaccination to their children.
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ealthy child ratio of
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ural area is lesser than urban areas.They would more prone to viral infection. To conclude the discussion, Despite the facts of uneducated caregivers and child allergic response
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believe that vaccination should be rational throughout the world.
Thus
, global children, have more survival rate they become healthy and nation become healthy.
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