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schools are no longer necessary, because children can get so much information available through the Inteenet, and they can study just as well at home. To what extent do you agree or disagree

#schools #children #information #inteenet #study #home
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 education in traditional schools are trending to disadvantages.More and more people choose to stay at home and learn from
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COVID-19.In fact,people didn’t realize internet classes preciously
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 because we can study in any place we want and we don’t need to worry about absent we just need a computer
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orm so we can save a lot of money.The most important aspect is safety,as everyone knows we are still in the century of COVID-19 if we go out we will get the virus
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 internet schools provide a better learning way to us. Despite
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 element of society that’s why we have to study in school by face to face with teachers and make relationships with classmates even we can find boyfriend and girlfriend.Internet classes can not
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people need to go to school.
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