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More and more wild animals are being kept in the zoo these days. Do the advantages of this trend outweigh its disadvantages?

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In
this
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 modernized era, the wildlife conservation authorities have resorted to making the zoo home for non-domestic animals.
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 has majorly come as a safety measure to both the public and the animals. In my perspective, I believe that
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 is rather positive. In
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 article, I intend to defend my thesis statement.
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 and foremost, the public is protected from attack by wild animals;
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 , animals
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 as lions, hyenas and tigers are dangerous to the community as they may injure the citizens.
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, a lot of cash will be spent taking care of the medical bills of the victims;
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 ,in turn, will create fear in public
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 it is a good idea to keep these animals at a wildlife centre.
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, keeping wild animals in a designated area will prevent hunters from killing them; to illustrate,a number of animals in East Africa have been hunted down for food. If measures are not taken into consideration to keep these creatures, they will become extinct
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 of hunting.
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, the zoo has a number of wild animals which will eventually attract tourists; to illustrate, a number of tourists have come all the way to Uganda Wildlife Centre in Entebbe due to see the wild creatures;
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, in turn, has improved the tourism industry. In fact ,these creature's well-being is paramount at the designated area where they are kept; to cite an example,all basic needs are provided which seems a better option for these creatures.
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, keeping creatures in a designated area encroaches on their freedom.
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,
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,is not an issue because of all the benefits as mentions above. In conclusion, it is my opinion that the merits outweigh the demerits of keeping animals at the zoo.
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, the authorities need to consider making
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 development compulsory to make life better.
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