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Society is based on rules and laws. It could not function if individuals were free to do whatever they wanted to do. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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The public is governed by various regulations and it is commonly argued that without them communities would not function. I partially agree with
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they instil structure yet their static nature may equally hinder societal functions. Laws and rules can be considered as the confines under to operate in thereby enforcing the system.
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 for communities to operate effectively and efficiently particular protocols and procedures need to be followed
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 individuals may conduct themselves haphazardly resulting in a dysfunctional environment.
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0% chance of leading into anarchy which will bring the industry and the community to a halt. Evidently, lawlessness can lead to a dysfunctional nation.
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, the rigidity of legislation may cripple civilization. The majority of laws and rules are static but expected to control a dynamic environment. As
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 when conditions have changed. To instantiate, studies have shown that 70% of the countries have failed to function in the e-hailing taxi environment since the regulations governing the taxi industry are not conducive to the new technology.
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, it is clear that the regulation’s rigidity in a dynamic
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 can equally ground
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. In conclusion, I partially agree that
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on one hand, laws bring order to communities yet,
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, they can impede operations due to their limited agility.
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