Consumers are faced with increasing numbers of advertisements from competing companies. To what extent do you think are consumers influenced by advertisements? What measures can be taken to protect them?

Nowadays, many people enjoy playing
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video
game
on the computer or the
game
console. While some people believe that
video
game
has some negative effects, some people argue that playing the
video
game
can be harmless fun. Personally, I partly think the disadvantages of
video
game
outweigh the advantages. On the one hand,
video
games can be beneficial in some ways, entertaining and educational.
Firstly
, Gamers spend some time on virtual worlds which are always exciting and engaging. After a daily commute,
for instance
, people playing the
video
game
and relaxing could release them from real-life work pressure. For an educational perspective, some RPG games are designed based on real historical backgrounds,
such
as Creed of Assassin and Dynasty Warriors. Lots of history knowledge could be learned while people are enjoying it.
Furthermore
, some research has been shown that some of the puzzle
game
encourage logical thinking, and helps the development of the brain.
On the other hand
, there are some serious drawbacks of
video
games that we can’t ignore. Gaming can be highly addictive, and online games
in particular
, because the developers are constantly giving scores, new virtual equipment, targets and rewards to keep gamers playing it. These types of games usually luring people to spend money on it, to get better scores, weapons and
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.
Besides
, many children and teens now spend hours on the
game
each day to get higher levels or scores than their friends.
This
addiction could
effect
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their sleep problem, homework, and
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worst result is failed on the school exam. In conclusion,
although
video
games have its only benefits in some ways, it seems to me that the potential dangers are more significant than the advantage.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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