Some people say that in all levels of education, from primary schools to universities, too much time is spent on learning facts and not enough on learning practical skill. Do you agree or disagree?

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Education is a most essential factor in a
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life. It is commonly argued that, in schools and colleges, teaching
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on facts
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rather than
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applying them practically.
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type of
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method commences from primary till
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graduation. In my opinion, I agree with the above statement as it generates
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of confidence among students and there are additional
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required to perform the actual field job.
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, from my experience, the learning system in countries like India
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focuses more on theoretical actualities than providing an opportunity to apply them
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real
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to enhance the skills of the students.
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methodology generates
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of confidence among young
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to face the actual situation, once they enter
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society.
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, field training should be provided, as
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would help them to enlighten their knowledge and talents.
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, one who was taught the whole time based on theories and truths
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will be unable to apply them in real-time
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as she or he did not have any exposure to it and
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as
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inexperienced.
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, in order to tackle
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uncertain
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, it is mandatory to have
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.
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, what was imparted to us throughout our life as
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will not be enough to accomplish the job in a company.
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, the actual requirement of an organisation
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a particular job opening will
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or
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will not be the same as what we learnt from the universities.
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account
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undergraduate
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offered
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a position as an Accountant
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a reputed company, the candidate
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not be allowed to start immediately, as they
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training to carry out their responsibilities in that organisation.
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, I deem that, it is necessary to have field study starting from all
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of learning, as
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will aid
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the
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self-confidence and prepare the young mind
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the world after their studies.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • education system
  • curriculum
  • factual knowledge
  • practical skills
  • critical thinking
  • problem solving
  • academic achievement
  • real-world application
  • balance
  • integration
  • learning outcomes
  • employment opportunities
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