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Some people think the best way to stay fit is by joining a gym, while others think doing everyday activities such as walking is sufficient. Discuss both views and give your opinion

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A revolutionary change has been observed in people, regarding their health and lifestyle. Everybody wants to stay fit and active,
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 why the maximum public joins a gym. But it is not always easy to maintain a balance between personal and professional life. At the same time, some believe that doing everyday activities
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 as walking is sufficient. In
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 essay, will try to cover all benefits as well as downsides of gyming. Undoubtedly, going workout is a more sensible decision than staying at home watching Netflix.
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, exercise boost your metabolism, which leads to better digestion.
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, increases your strength and energy level. To exemplify, a person who exercises on daily basis is comparatively more active throughout the day than other people. But on the other side, if have noticed that exercising and maintaining a healthy routine is becoming even more tedious day by day.
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, people start changing their eating habits and prefer home remedies to improve digestion.
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, in many families generally,both husband and wife are working. Due to lack of time and energy, people think doing everyday activities
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 as walking is sufficient.
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, many employees walk within the office area after lunch. Many avoid using the lift and use stairs in the workplace.
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, in today's' scenario, even basic essential commodities have become very expensive,
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 how can a middle-class person afford a gym? In the end, I would like to say that workout has become a basic necessity of life because a healthy body leads to a healthy mind. It is not mandatory to, one can only stay fit by going to the gym. By making small changes in lifestyle one can easily, make a sea change in their body and life.
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