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“Prevention is better than cure”. Researching and treating diseases is too costly so it would be better to invest in preventative measures. To what extent do you agree?

#“prevention #cure” #diseases #measures
In these days, there are many diseases coming
in to
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 the picture which
leds
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leads
LEDs
 to losing lives . Some people believe that
,
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 researching and treating will be more expensive so it is better to invest
on
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 preventing it.In
this
 essay, I agree on both the points, there should be some expenses for controlling the diseases ,
also
 at the same
time
 , investigation and understanding and proper treatment of diseases
becomes
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 an important task.
To begin
 with, Most of the
time
 we are unaware of the
kind
 of
disease
 that spread or occur in our day to day life, so it becomes very important to know about the current situations and researchers have to do a
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 study on the
kind
 of possible outspread , which might occur in future.
For Example
, Covid-19 is the one of the most pandemic
disease
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 which killed numerous lives at the same
time
,
n
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ew covid-19 virus has led to the mutation of new
kind
 of virus, which spreads
more
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faster than previous one.
This
 was possible only when the scientists were able to analyze and educate
themseleves
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themselves
 about the new virus only with the research.It is
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 most costly affair, apparently
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without understanding the nature
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the
disease
 , it becomes very difficult to treat any rare diseases. Analysts
spends
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 most of the
time
 in knowing and developing vaccines
inorder
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 to control spreading any
kind
 of virus.
On the other hand
, it is not possible to predict the
kind
 of sickness that will occur.It can spread through any form. It can be through birds ,animals or any sea animals. It becomes
vey
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very
 difficult
to
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 scientists to make predictions on the kinds of diseases that will spread in the coming days and start creating
d
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rug.
However
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making all the
neccessary
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necessary
 arrangments as soon as the
dieases
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diseases
disease
 comes to the picture will always prevent it from spreading.
For instance
, Bird-flu ,
v
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accine was discovered as soon
the
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it came
in to
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 the light. In
conculsion
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conclusion
, It is always to be prepared for the outbreaks , at the same
time
 it cannot be predicted .both the process involves
l
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ot of money and investigation so researcher
have
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 to spend most of the
time
 to analyse the
disease
 irrespective of its nature.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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