Write about the following topic: Some people say that school education is not useful and the essence of study can be acquired at home. Do you agree? Why or why not? Use reasons and specific examples to explain your answer. Write at least 250 words.

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of society argues that attending school for studies is not required and the importance of learning can be done at
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ouse. Personally, I do not agree with
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eal environment of learning. As schools have structured in a way that kids can make friends, meet teachers, visit
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ibrary for learning.
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lassroom at the age of six, they can become best friends for their lives and support each other all the time.
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in an
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physical activity program,
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ody in perfect state.
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to sports like football. It required great practice to learn the techniques of
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sports.
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it body and eating
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ight food to strengthen muscle and bones.
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least it will increase team spirit among the kids and learning from failures and sporting spirit.
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sychological burden. Studies reveal that humans perform better when they work in
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roup. It will raise confidence levels and decrease loneliness among kids.
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and obtain better results in exams. In conclusion, with all benefits that an education system provides to
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hild from identifying, nurturing their talents continuously. It
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and enhance it.
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