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Most schools offer some types of physical education programs to their students. Why is physical education important? Should physical education classes be optional or required?

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Nowadays, students are required to take more and more hours studying at school.
Besides
 theoretical classes, most schools
also
 offer physical study classes. Despite great benefits that physical training provides to both physical and mental health of students, schools should only categorize it as a recommended option rather than a required class. The most obvious effect that physical discipline does to a student is giving the child a healthy body. By taking exercises or playing sports regularly, children can burn calories and strengthen their muscles. From doing regular exercises at school, students will form a good habit of working out at home to maintain a healthy lifestyle.
In addition
, good health
also
 prevents students from serious illnesses,
such
 as diabetes, heart diseases, and so on.
Furthermore
, physical activities contribute significantly to positive mental health. With a fit body, students will be more confident, energetic and optimistic.
Besides
, they can release stress after long studying hours by playing a sports game with friends, which helps them gain their motivation to get back to study better. Even though physical learning classes are of great importance, many students may not receive the benefits fully.
This
 is because each person's physical condition is unique so that one training program cannot be suitable and safe for everybody.
On the other hand
, playing a sport effectively requires both players' interest and some natural skills.
Hence
, students will not be able to enjoy a class that offers the sport that they do not like, or they may fail sports tests that require natural skills which they do not possess.
Therefore
, schools should only promote physical education as an optional class with valuable benefits and encourage students to take part in.
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