In many societies, elderly people often live in retirement homes. This is not appropriate because families should always care for their aging members. Do you agree?

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In recent years, the question of an ageing society has become a controversy around the world. Some people argue that elderly people should stay with their family due to expecting suitable cares. Regarding

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issue, I partially disagree with that statement. Following is the reason why I am not in favour of it, including another agreement.

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with, according to advances in treatment forms, modern society has various health care facilities which could ensure significant useful cares. For nursing home example,

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centre is not only providing proper services but

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activities

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as attending communities, playing games. It is obvious means that senior citizens could spend meaningful time rather than just remain with a sense of bored and lonely at home during other family member’s workloads.

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, old people do not need to stay

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amily’s house daringly.

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, it is deniable fact that some old generations want to live rest of life with their family.

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because, they could be ready the death, sharing common memories or maintaining the

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sentence before they had gone off which if they live in a retirement home, they could not.

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, several elderly people insist

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resting with family members. In conclusion, there are many places where seniors could stay in

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as a silver town, retirement accommodations, and family house. So, it is the best way to choose the living space regarding followed by what factors elderly think importance whether influences by family love or convenient lifestyle.

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