Some people say that the main environmental problem of our time is the loss of particular species of plants and animals. Others say that there are more important environmental problems. Discuss both these views and give your opinion.

Few topics have drawn as much scholarly attention as major environmental problems of our time, especially in the past few decades.
Although
there is substantial debate over whether the
extension
of some species of plants and animals is a major environmental problem or there are more serious environmental problems in our time, I am of the opinion that former proposition has several strong elements that deserve attention. A number of benefits can be attributed to different species of animals and plants in our environment, which play a very important role in our lives. On the one hand,
pollution
and overpopulation not only damaging our quality of
life
but
also
killing many species of animals and plants. On the other, an
extension
of animals and flora can cause severe
damage
to the ecosystem which will destroy the balance of
life
. Animals and plants are dependent on each other for their survival,
damage
to the ecosystem will break the cycle of
life
and can bring catastrophic disasters which can affect the entire human race. Examples of
this
scenario can be seen in different stages of human history, an
extension
of sparrows caused a severe drought in China which lead to the death of millions. Admittedly, it is true that there are other environmental problems like water and air
pollution
, seriously effecting human
life
and one cannot dismiss the
damage
associated with these problems.
However
, the problems caused by the
extension
of flora and fauna appear to be insignificant against the deluge of the problems triggered by environmental issues. The impact of the problems
such
as air
pollution
or water
pollution
,
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is direct and quick on human
life
which is the reason people think these are the major environmental problems, but the impact of
damage
to the ecosystem is slow and sever. In conclusion, I would not wish to underestimate the concerns regarding other environmental issues.
Nevertheless
, I feel that effects related
extension
of particular plant and animal is far too great to ignore.
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