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Some people fail in school, but end up being successful in life. Why do you think is the case? What is the most important thing to succeed in life?

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Success
 is nothing but the dreams made true by acting upon it. I believe that
school
 grades or marks are not the precise indicators that define the level of
success
 that a
person
 will achieve. There are many great examples of personalities who become successful despite being a college or
school
 dropouts. In my opinion passionate about dreams and
perseverance
 in achieving their dreams is what made them successful today.
Firstly
, chasing dreams passionately is more important than striving to be good at academics to attain
success
 in
life
.
For example
, the greatest cricketer of India, Sachin Tendulkar, is a 10th class dropout but his dedication towards his dreams has made him the most successful batsman in the world.
Thus
, bad grades in
school
 do not necessarily mean failure in
life
.
Finally
, a
person
 who is persistent about a set goal never fails to become successful in
life
. It means, if one is persistent enough to get up whenever struck with failure and do it all again will eventually achieve
success
 in
life
. To prove my point, the story of an ant who is trying to climb a wall fails 100 times but it never gives up and because of its
perseverance
, it succeeds the 101st time.
This
 one quality is often found in all the people who are best at what they do and are considered to a successful
person
. Overall, one does not need to pass
school
 with good grades but to learn the quality of
perseverance
 whenever they fail from
school
 or from
life
 in order to be a successful
person
. The government must include the lessons on
perseverance
 and its importance in
success
 in order to educate the children about the failure which is nothing but a stepping stone for
success
.
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