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International sporting events could contribute greatly to peace and stability in the world. Do you agree/ disagree

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There is currently a contentious argument over whether events related to sports could bring about peace and balance between nations. I do not believe that sports are the main path to cope with it since worldwide have other problems that can be solved through sports events.
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, it is feasible to say that contemporary sports events have not contributed to a better
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 so far. There being several great events sports
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 as
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 cup, Superbowl, NBA and suchlike, which are highly important for developed nations in the
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 decades, they do not play an important role when it comes to developing countries. To illustrate, those nations that are considered poorer
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 as Latin countries, African and suchlike did not take advantage from sports events aforementioned since they have other aspects that can not be solved by sports as starvation and corruption.
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, not all countries partake in sports events due to the lack of subsidies. Most of the developing countries struggle to sustain their population, which is a sad reality for the major nations in the globe in recent history because they are not able to afford international competitions.
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, most of the important events in the sports
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 are not democratic since developed nations have taken far advantage in comparison to the developing ones. In conclusion, I believe that events regarding the sports environment have not had played an important role in
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 issues, especially when in regard to developing countries that need to tackle serious problems.
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, the poor countries have an enormous disadvantage in international events since they can not afford time and fund professional institutions to represent them in these competitions.
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