The growing number of overweight people is putting as train on the health care system in an effort to deal with the health issues involved. Some people think that the best way to deal with this problem is to introduce more physical education lessons in the school curriculum. To what extent do you agree or disagree? -

It is known that physical activities in general, promote a benefit for

health

preventing diseases.

However

, the practice goes beyond

health

.

For instance

, physical

education

lessons can learn how the students can work

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a team; they learn how important is socialize trough the sports and doesn´t overload

h

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ealth

system

. Personally, I agree with the introduce more physical and activities

education

lessons in the school schedule and I feel

this

way for tree reasons

Firstly

, nowadays where technology has an important role in our life,

for instance

,people can do anything just pushing a bottom or one click

in

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w

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ebsite.

This

situation goes to believe that everybody can do or solving the problems themselves and believing working alone is enough. I would say that work a team is crucial for broad up.

In addition

, physical activities can improve focus and reasoning during the classes, according

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researches.

Furthermore

, socialize has an important role in our society, especially in students life. How like a said before, more and more has been normal students make their lessons or assignment alone, surfing on

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nternet or searching or sharing their questions only the colleagues

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i

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nternet. Now we have an important social problem, where students prefer

m

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to

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ake their homework alone rather than to make

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work in

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roup. In my opinion, the physical classes

education

could show how import is

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socializing.

Nevertheless

, lonely, anti-social behaviour and other practices avoid social contact can be caused bad eating habits.

For instance

, it is very normal recognized fat people associated an anti-social behaviour, where they can spend a lot of time using cell phones, video-games and PC games. The isolation, promoted

consequently

high ingestion of food, little or none caloric expenditure, taking the overweight. These cascades, beginning with a little social isolation, can be become a burden for our

health

system

, overloading the

system

, that could be avoided introducing physical classes on school schedule. In conclusion, I would say physical practice activities are crucial for the body, mental,

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and economic. Whether the government understand how important to spend money-making projects for physical

education

classes, our

health

system

couldn´t be crowded caring cases that could control with just physics exercises.