Some people argue that technological invention such as mobile phones are making people socially less interactive.

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, Several people think that the products are made by technology, are the bad result that communication of people may decrease in

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. From my point of view, I strongly agree that modern innovations are made people do not interested to talk with other people. Presently, many countries around the world, create new technological items

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every day. There are many companies that design

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electronic equipment.

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technological

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make several people ignore the

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, some people believe that there are not the main reasons that people less their communication with others. Because If people do not obsessed with

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technology too much,

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problem will not arise.

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arious effect on our

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, some people both addict playing games and talking with people on the internet.

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their people habit.

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but not least, it is not only become estranged for other people but

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in their family, so these are the reasons why they agree with

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a lot of high-tech equipment

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, I agree that all of the inventions are made people terrible.

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