You have just read an article in an international travel magazine which contained some information about your town that is incorrect. Write a letter to the editor of the magazine. In your letter: -correct the information in the article -explain why it is important for the magazine to give correct information -suggest what the magazine should do about this situation
Dear Sir or Madam,
I am writing
this
letter to express my dissatisfaction given by a piece of incorrect information about my hometown that I read in a magazine
which you are the editor. It was written in the article that one of our greatest tourist spots, called "Pão de açúcar" is located in the heart of the north zone. However
, the "pão de açúcar" is actually based on
the south zone of Rio de Janeiro. These are opposite directions, Change preposition
in
therefore
this
mistake must be corrected for the maintenance of the accuracy of your magazine
.
I am from Rio de Janeiro, is
a city that receives billions of tourists every year. As is it known, my hometown is acknowledged Correct pronoun usage
which is
by
being a tropical city, with many beaches and famous places Change preposition
as
such
as the "Corcovado" and "Pão de açucar". In the meantime, violence and the increase of robberies in the favelas are also
characteristics that define my city. If your magazine
, with such
importance and visibility, gives the wrong direction for tourists, they might head into the favelas and suffer some severe consequences for that reason.
Thereby, there are many viable ways to solve this
situation and soften the damages of the wrong information in the previous article. I recommend that the editor prepare beforehand a reparation note correcting the information to the next
edition of the magazine
. In addition
, it would be beneficial if it also
contains a map of Rio and tips on how to take the subway and the train.
Yours faithfully,
Beatriz InacioSubmitted by bia_inaciooliveira on
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Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
Linking words are very important in your essay.
To score effectively on your IELTS exam, you should make an effort to implement short concise sentences coupled with linking words.
Almost every sentence in your essay should have a linking word of some sort.
In fact, the only sentences that can omit linking words are your background sentence and thesis.
Linking word examples:
- firstly
- secondly
- thirdly
- in additional
- moreover
- also
- for example
- for instance
- therefore
- however
- although
- even though
- despite
