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Advances in technology and automation have reduced the need for manual labour. Therefore, working hours should be reduced. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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Technology
 has been advanced like never before in
this
 era. Proving to be a bane,
technology
 and
automation
 have reduced the manual
labour
, resulted in the reduction of overheads and
also
 aided in saving time.
Although
 there is a reduction in the
labour
 hours, in my opinion, the working jours should not be reduced. In
this
 essay, I shall discuss the reasons for the same to support my views.
Technology
 and
automation
 have reduced manual
labour
. The time saved due to
this
 can be utilised for more production and
hence
 increase in the product-output and profit margin. It can be
also
 argued that the balance time left can be used by the organisation by employing their
labour
 force expansion into different sectors of the market and achieve a competitive edge.
However
,
although
 a lot of functions and activities are automated, certain after-processing work requires manual work.
For instance
, data recording can be done by the computer, but storing the files and printing the reports require human force.
Hence
 100%
automation
 can never be gained by the use of
technology
. It was rightly stated in the Business magazine
last
 week that "
Technology
 is a brainchild of human inventions". Those who argue that working hours should be reduced due to the invention of
technology
 and
automation
 holds a different view. One of the reason is that the reduced hours should be rewarded to the
labour
 force for their leisure.
Then
 there are concerns about the hard work they have put in for so many years to be taken into consideration.
Although
 there are strong arguments on both sides of the case, in conclusion, there should be no reduction in working hours due to the introduction of
technology
 and
automation
.
Instead
, in my opinion, the balance hours should be used to increase the scale of production, expansion and increase profit margins as discussed above.
Moreover
, I would strongly recommend the organisations to draft their policies
accordingly
.
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